FREEZE TAG
“You ever noticed that even on the hottest of days, Evan never sweats?”
“His mother says that he takes after his father.”
“What does that mean?”
“I don’t know. Ms. Felcher gets a faraway look in her eye. I just don’t go there.”
“Evan never talks about his dad. What happened?”
“Heard he just went away. Never proved it, but they say he killed a man.”
“Must be true. Why else would he have left ‘em?”
“Evan is weird. He’s never played Freeze Tag with us.”
“His mother won’t let him. Says it would be the death of us.”
Written for the Carrot Ranch Challenge: Prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story that involves a children’s game or rhyme. You can create something new or go with something traditional. You can write with a twist, humor, menace or glee. Hop, skip or jump wherever the prompt leads you.
It's All in Finding the Right Words 
Clever take on the prompt.
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I remember freeze tag! Your flash is well-written with the use of dialog and captures the essence of youthful rumors.
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Thanks
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Really wonderful – and I like the slightly weird and perhaps morbid or darker twist – the sense of it is well played out in the conversation. Captured so well!
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Thank you so much! And thanks for the read.
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You’re most welcome 😀
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Great flash. I really like the way your built up the mystery through the rumours. Your character reminds me of Elsa in “Frozen”, or King Midas with the golden touch. Well done! I’m not surprised he’s not allowed to play tag.
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Interesting. I want to know more about these characters now. Great flash.
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Thank you sooo much! And thanks for the read!
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Loved this flash particularly the twist at the end. His Mum obviously knows like father like son. Creepy. Would love a flash of Evan a few years on now.
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That would be interesting.
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